Poetry Journey #25

"A Name Worth Knowing" - Authentic Voice vs. Trying Too Hard

Finding My Natural Voice

This week's poem:

A Name Worth Knowing

Not the kind to walk in slow motion
When the sun hits just right.
Not one to toss their hair like a movie scene,
But worth watching all the same.
Not a mystery, not a puzzle—
Just someone worth knowing,
And if they have time,
I'd like to know more.

My Response: This feels more like my natural voice than almost anything else I've written.

What I Think Works:

• The conversational tone feels genuine

• "Not a mystery, not a puzzle" pushes against romantic clichés

• The ending is humble and honest

• It feels contemporary and real

What I'm Learning: When I stop trying to sound "poetic" and just try to be honest, my voice gets stronger.

Technical Elements:

• Free verse that follows natural speech patterns

• Good use of repetition ("Not the kind," "Not one," "Not a")

• Casual language that still creates a complete thought

My Concerns:

• Is this too casual for "serious" poetry?

• Does it lack the complexity that literary journals want?

• Is accessibility the same as simplicity?

What This Makes Me Wonder: Have I been overthinking poetry? Is my natural voice actually more interesting than my "poetic" voice?

Questions for Readers:

• Does this feel authentic or too casual?

• Which approach do you prefer—this conversational style or my more "literary" attempts?

• How do you balance accessibility with sophistication?

• Is this complete as it is or does it need development?